Passive Voice and Communication

Thanks to WordPress’s editor, “passive voice” has been thought about a lot lately.  It just happens that today I was inspired to purposely write an entry with much passive voice included.  A fictitious, but feasible, VBS memo was thought of.  Now it will be written about this way.  Trouble is already being caused–has it been noticed?  Perhaps the subject has been a bit obscured by it–on purpose, of course.

If you are already saying, “Huh?” the right track is being followed.  I should be stayed with–the point will be seen soon enough.

Dear VBS Teachers and Helpers,

VBS will be had soon.  The children should be being prayed for.  Great blessings are expected as His Spirit has been promised to be poured out in answer to our prayers.

Helpers are still needed, so be sure your friends have been invited.  A great team, united in prayer, is depended on.

So, the Lord will be talked to.  He will be asked, “What would I be had to do?”  He will be asked, “Who would I be had to invite?”

I am sorry if you were confused.  Perhaps it will be tried again.

Sincerely,

VBS Leader

Take 2:

Thanks to WordPress’s editor, I have thought a lot about “passive voice” lately.  It just happens that today Daryl L. L. Houston at The Daily Post inspired me to purposely write an entry with much passive voice included.  I thought of a fictitious, but feasible, VBS memo.  Now I will write about it this way.  Passive voice is already causing trouble–have you noticed?  Perhaps it has obscured the subject a bit–on purpose, of course.

If you are already saying, “Huh?” you are following the right track.  Stay with me–soon enough, you will see the point.

Dear VBS Teachers and Helpers,

Our church will be having VBS soon.  We should be praying for the children.   We expect great blessings as the Lord has promised to pour out His Spirit in answer to our prayers.

We still need helpers, so be sure you have invited your friends.  The success of Vacation Bible School depends on a great team, united in prayer.

So, talk to the Lord.  Ask Him, “What would You have me to do?”  Ask Him, “Who would you have me to invite?”

I am sorry if my letter confused you.  Now I have tried it again. 🙂

Sincerely,

VBS Leader

P.S.  We can strengthen our writing and communication (and not to mention, we can be sure to give due credit and take due blame) by nearly always avoiding the “passive voice”!

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***In order to help make your VBS planning as smooth as possible, Hasten Home’s Vacation Bible School materials sets include several samples for communication and advertising: church bulletin inserts, newspaper advertisements, letters to parents, schedules, and more!***


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